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Although it is a freedom to use tobacco(烟草)while some people think it should be made illegal as the same way as other drugs. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is public debate that use tobacco should be forbidden while others think not. In my opinion, I think it impossible to get rid of using tobacco as it is rooted indulgence since the beginning of the human history. Imagine your father smoked after tired work, and you ran onto him, tasting the flavor, which is the family entertainment. Why to grab the pleasure of others? In deed in the medical perstpective, using tobacco is dangerous to health for cigaratte contains of nicotin to affect body apparatus, so someone propose the plan to make using tobacco illegal. Going too far is as bad as not going far enough. All normal people prefer to use tobacco properly.
It is the time we explore the truth of the difference between tobacco and marijuana. Marijuana lead to the lethal disease, and sucking marijuana make people not to live the positive life, which is natural difference between them.
To be sure, to reduce smoking is right even if to the older smoker due to the consideration of their health. I don’t disagree to induce people to abstain from smoking. So such the old smoker will join the abstaining army (if they would). On the other hand to abstain from smoking should be in the initiative way which aims to remain the happiness of all people.